Correct my paper.
Here are my professor’s comments.” I see some good ideas in this essay about racism and also about memory and symbolism. I think if you conference with me and then restructure this essay, you can achieve a higher grade.
Basically, this essay does not have an essay structure. Ideas are appearing in unpredictable places and a majority of the details and examples in the body paragraphs do not relate to what you have stated or argued in the thesis. This means that you are not certain of the organizational pattern for a college-essay.
Once the structure is more pronounced, we can work on some other skills such as mechanics and phrasing.”
